||[Jun. 10th, 2009|07:55 pm]
Hi! I've been lurking the main comm for a few months now and, well, I have some sketches I'd like an opinion on.|
I admit right off I am no expert on the fashion and I am a relative newbie to it. So, what I need is some brutally honest critique on these designs from people who are more experience with the fashion than me.
Bear in mind that these are sketches and do not have color, nor are the intended finished product. This is basically for my reference when I go to do the actual drawings. My notes on each are below.
1. Top left - Vest and shirt
2. Top right - intended to be white or off white with pink ribbon, pink or very light blue trim and small, delicate lace. Pocketwatch print, bunny handbag, headband with another bunny head. Intended to be worn with white, closed-toed shoes and solid white stockings.
3. Bottom left - This is probably not lolita at all, but it was interesting to draw. Dark blue coat with white or yellow lining and brass buttons, white undercoat with gold braid trim, white skirt, pale yellow vest. Shoes intended to be white or brown. Hat intended to be black.
4. Bottom right - Black dress with white blouse. Eye of Horus and reed print intended to be metallic gold.
Any and all feedback is appreciated. Including redlines.
I would wear the bejesus out of either of those coats. Although- black hat with a blue coat? I'd prefer they match. Also, I am sad you didn't ink out the breeches in the first drawing. Boystyles get no love.
The top right feels a bit cosplay-ish to me. By which I mean I think it's much better suited to 2 dimensions than to 3. I feel like in 3 dimensions it would get a bit bulky and the fabric wouldn't drape as nicely. Particularly at the top. Also, if I'm reading the details of the drawing correctly, its a very litteral interpretation of the "white rabbit", which is probabaly also contributing to that "cosplay" feeling.
BTW, thank you for taking the time to render these so clearly and appealingly!
I confess, I just dont quite "get" the 4th one. Its just not speaking to me. The motif and the form are saying two different things, and rather than the two statements combining in a way that I find thought-provoking, it just kind-of leaves me cold. But, I do think lolita needs an infusion of new icons and images, so yay for experimentation!
:D Really? Well, it's not final colors, so yeah... Blue and blue - especially since it's supposed to be a nice dark blue. The breeches, I had a brainfart on approaching the cut on the bottom and the exact look of the buttoning and pockets, so I left it out this time. D:
That one is the one that's giving me trouble (this is what I get for trying to draw what I literally dream). It is actually for a picture involving a Alice in Wonderland theme and is representing the white rabbit. XD The top, in particular is giving me the most trouble. It's gone from too tight sleeves with a scooping lace-up back, to princess cut and now something loosely based out of Victorian templates. If it helps, the shirt under it is separate.
You're welcome. I find it helps if I try to be as clear as I can about what I'm looking to do and what I need help on.
4th one's really new. I'm still playing with the idea of it. I think I might remove the upper crinkled fabric, change the waist to a plain, tailored fit and move the eye up so it's out of the reed pattern. The other idea is to strike it completely and try to spin out something using cream or off white and black eye design. My brain keeps drifting back to using rounded collars and loose sleeves, though.
Edited at 2009-06-11 02:19 am (UTC)